Commenting on a Classmate's Work

I won't mention any names, but the portfolio essays that I reviewed and wrote a letter about helped me to learn a lot about what I can improve in my own writing. Her essays were in a narrative-style rather than a formal essay-like one, which made them much more interesting and engaging. That is something I must consider for my own writing in the future; I often make my writing to formal and it ends up sounding dry. I shouldn't be afraid to add a little personal touch to what I write, because it will only make my peices more appealing to the audience. Sacrificing formality for interest will probably be a good exchange nine times out of ten.