Responses to Comments on my Research Proposal

When Professor Scott read over my research proposal, she immediatly detected one of the major flaws that I hadn't realized before. I never actually ask for anything in the course of my proposal. Since the idea is that we are writing these to obtain funding, this is a key problem. Because my research is very simple and requires no special equipment (and I would not have to quit a job), I don't need any large sum of money to conduct it. Professor Scott suggested that maybe instead I could ask for a small sum of money so that every adult who participates in the study will receive a small compensation for their efforts. The other comments she gave are mostly structural things - working with transitions, and where to include longer explanations and where to keep it simple. This was the main concern I had expressed in my cover letter, whether or not the document met the purpose, flowed well, and made sense as a whole. I feel like this question was answered and I know exactly how to fix my draft to make a good final copy for the portfolio.