Revising Questions

What is your project?

My project involves gathering as much information as possible about SEEDS so that I can hopefully indentify what makes it "tick". SEEDS incorporates instruction in valubale envrionmental concepts with enjoyable outdoor experiences. If I can indentify where exactly these qualities originate from, then I will be able to better understand why SEEDS is successful.

What works?

My draft uses an informal, highly descriptive style that I've been told by my peers creates a very appropriate tone for the proposal. I like the sections that I've chosen to include, because I feel they allow me to elaborate fully on my topic without epeating myself.

What else might be said?

My paper pretty much assumes that SEEDS provides a quality learning environment for children and doesn't really mention anything about what it means if I find this is not the case in my research. I've also left out a lot of the annecdotal stuff that I got from the newspapers and talked about SEEDS in general terms rather than relaying specific stories.

What's next?

Hopefully, if my research supports that fact that SEEDS is a very good experience for children, the Virginia Department of Consevation and Recreation will go on to implement similar ideas in locations all across the state, and give kids everywhere the same opportunity for learning and development through experience.